Up ahead, near me, close by
To my right, the northeast quadrant
Around the point before me,
behind the reeds, the lily pads, the bushes
A burst of squawks and the
Beating of heavy wings
Filled the air, my hearing
The head and then the long endless body
Rose before me
Launches, vertical
Right over
The spine of my canoe
The heron, long moments
Blocking my vision
No more than ten feet above
My open jaw
And transfixed eyes.
It flew toward me
Thwump, thwump
I heard the wings breaking the
Early morning stillness around me
The majestic bird, a titan
Cupped its sails, unfurled
Into the still air of the morning
And hovered for a moment,
Or a lifetime,
Directly above my right shoulder
Casting a faint shadow
Each feather was visible -
Rust, cream, slate,
And light blue eye shadow.
The feet and legs stretched behind
Tows pointed to cut through the air
An endless line unbroken
My head rolled backward to watch
The bird fly off, behind me
Across the lake, to its next feeding
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edited
August 21, 2015
Ten
Feet Overhead – v9
(editing
version 6)
edited
December 9, 2014
Ten
Feet Overhead – v8
(editing
version 6)
edited April 3, 2014
Ten Feet (not Twenty) Overhead – v7
(editing
version posted 5/3/2004)
Edited
September 20, 2012
“Ten
Feet Overhead – v6”
editing
the 4th version (the one with Marie Harris input)
&
Edited
September 20, 2012
“Ten
Feet Overhead – v5”
(editing
the 3rd version)
inspired by
reading it at Poets’ Corner
monthly poetry
reading,
at the Suncook
Senior Center
September 10,
2012
&
Saved as separate file and reposted
September 20, 2012
published version – 2/7/2004
“Ten Feet
Overhead – v4”
Written June 18, 2001, edits June 21 and June 22, 2001, based
on input from NH Poet Laureate, Marie Harris.
&
The evolution
of the poem - Ten Feet Overhead”
The three drafts below represent the evolution of a poem,
"Ten Feet Overhead", based on a morning on Swains Lake in Barrington,
NH in 2001, reading down from 1st draft to a second version, finally to the
published version, posted here on 2/7/04.
&
“Ten Feet
Overhead – v3”
June 21, 2001
“Ten Feet
Overhead – v2”
June 22, 2001
“Ten Feet
Overhead – v1”
June 18, 2001
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